Issue: whether a school should require students to lock phones away during class. Thesis: The school should require phones to be stored during core instruction while allowing teacher-approved academic or emergency exceptions. A draft paragraph begins with a broad sentence and then quotes the prompt detail that the prompt materials say teachers lose time to messaging distractions but also use phones for language recordings and family emergency contact plans, but it stops before explaining why the detail matters. Which revision plan best supplies a focused subclaim, support, reasoning, and final connection?