A writing coach reviews a mostly complete response about whether a neighborhood services office should open a supervised waste drop-off site twice a month. Prompt issue: whether a neighborhood services office should open a supervised waste drop-off site twice a month. Draft profile: The essay may have a relevant position, but key sentences combine several ideas with unclear referents: 'This helps them when they do it there because the problem is their thing.' The wording makes the thesis and evidence difficult to evaluate. Which diagnosis would most improve a revision plan for the response about open a supervised waste drop-off site twice a month?