8.67 Revise to improve pacing
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Passage

[1] Diego arrived at the market for tryouts with two minutes to spare. [2] Diego spent four sentences describing the stack of crates and the murmur of shoppers. [3] Then a bottle tipped and shattered. [4] Diego explained the main action in one quick sentence. [5] After that, Diego described every clap in the room.

Which revision best improves pacing by slowing down important events and speeding up minor ones?